你会用动词吗?

你会用动词吗?

 

很多人以为,动词就是动作Action,动作Action的表达就是动词。

其实并不如此!

 

在我们日常的文字中,许多表达动作的词也经常会以形容词/副词/名词等形式出现:

 

如以下这段文章:

  1. The governance of Lyon’s hospitals differed from the levels of strictness prevalent in other cities; deviations from access rules were typically possible. Regardless of place of birth, admission was common, based on employment for the greater glory of “our manufactures,” according to the language of the hospital board. From 1802 through 1829, annual admissions to the hospitals exceeded 10,000. There was general acceptance among the city’s governing class of nonstandard responses to increased levels of unemployment. As in the 1837-38 public assistance inscription of thirty-five thousand people.

 

请注意我们以上划线的词语,并重新读一下我们下面的改写:

  1. Lyon’s hospitals were not governed by the strict rules that prevailed in some cities; the rules of admission could be bent and often were. As long as a man or woman, no matter where his or her place of birth, had worked for the greater glory of “our manufacturers,” as the hospital board liked to say, he or she would be admitted. From 1802 through 1829, more than 10,000 persons were admitted each year to the hospitals. The city’s governing class was always prepared to take extraordinary measures when unemployment ran high, as it did in 1837-38, when thirty-five thousand people were inscribed on the public assistance rolls.

 

不知道大家有没有发现B段的文章内容更清晰。思考一下为什么?

 

我们经常说写作的有效性。文章想要清晰明了不拖沓,就用直接的动词描述你想表达的内容。

 

下面我们再来看下面一个例子:

Giuliani threatened the brokerages.

Giuliani gave a speech threatening the brokerages.

Giuliani spoke threateningly about the brokerages.

 

这里的Threaten在三个句子里分别作为动词/动名词/副词。三个句子要表达的是一个意思。其中,threatened/gave/spoke分别作为动词, 但相信brokerage并不关心Giuliani是否gave 还是spoke, 只关心是否被threatened。第一个句子最简单有力。

 

所以我们写作中,动词并不总是要表达的那个动作。但是是否有利就取决于你选择的动词。如下:

Impotent: The man was walking on the platform.

Powerful: The man strode along the platform.

Impotent: Jim is a lover of country living.

Powerful: Jim treasures country living.

Impotent: There are three things that make me feel the way I do…

Powerful: Three things convince me…

 


 

使用动词的第一原则:

Express as verbs the actions that you want to dominate your readers’ understanding.

用你最想要读者理解的动作做“动词“

 

而写作的原则就是:

“Write with nouns and verbs, not with adjectives and adverbs.”

好的写作在于你原则的名词和动词,而非形容词和副词。

 

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